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Poison Clone  Empty Poison Clone

Tue Feb 11, 2020 10:17 pm
Name: Poison Clones
Element: Poison
Rank: B | A
Spec Type: Ninjutsu
Backstory: When your lonely, make toxic clones


Appearance: Identical clones of the user materializes near the user, when they detonate they explode in a form of a purple gas. Until they detonate, there is no way of knowing their a condensed poison jutsu unless through a chakra sight that entitles one to sense chakra differences. 
Handseals: Serpent/Dragon/Ram/Rat | + Tiger
Duration: Clones last until destroyed, The poison gas and it's effect duration is 3 posts
Cooldown:  posts used +1
Range: Clones can travel 50 meters max from the user before dispersing, and can only be made 2 meters from the user. 
Power: 30 | 50
Speed: 30 | 50
Health: - -
Stat Boosts: - -

What it does: 3 poison clones can be made as max at jutsu speed, each of them shares the same stats as the user but has 1 health, and the user's AP is evenly distributed between the clones rounded down. They can perform up to B rank techniques that the user has, along with matching equipment the user possesses. They follow shadow clone variant rules. 

Detonation: What actually make these clones unique is that they are created of condensed poison chakra, which also plays along with their detonation ability. If the clone is destroyed, then this also activates their detonation. This self destructive action is merely used to disperse the condensed chakra that holds them together, and spread the poisonous effects as a cloud gas in the shape of a sphere at the jutsu's speed. The poison that they are made of, attacks an individual's respiratory system after entering through the mouth or nose. If the individual can't pass the strength stat check that's equal or higher than the jutsu's power, they would temporarily suffer with difficulty to breath, as their lungs take the impact of the poison's effect. With the respiratory system of the individual being attack, they would receive a DoT that will nick away at their health during their time in the poison ( 30 | 50 damage each post within poison gas). This poisonous gas that disperses after the denoted clone has the ability of forming a 10 meter diameter sphere from where the clone once stood.

If the effected individual fails to get out of the poison's range in the minimum of 2 whole posts of it's duration, the poison will corrupt the individuals lungs. Despite it's earlier deceiving approach of only causing difficulty of breathing, at this duration of exposure the poison will forcefully cause the lungs of the individual to permanently constrict. This causes immense pain within one's chest and suffocation if they fail to receive immediate appropriate medical attention or an antidote with higher power than the jutsu itself. The immediate attention resulting to them having 2 posts in doing so after their lungs begins to construct. Resulting to death if they fail to do so.

-P.S all clones  share the same cooldown countdown and is unable to recover AP.

Character Specific: No
Wordcount to learn: 1,500 | 2,500
Action Cost: 30 | 40 for activation, half for poison upkeep 
Mastery: No
Bonus Requirements: Viperis Lineage
Canon or Custom: Bloodline


Last edited by Aroma Viperis on Wed Jul 13, 2022 6:50 pm; edited 18 times in total
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Poison Clone  Empty Re: Poison Clone

Thu Feb 13, 2020 10:02 am
As much as I like the aesthetic, I unfortunately can’t allow you to use any type of plant in your jutsu without wood release or another similar element that allows it to be done. If you remove mention of the flowers and have it come about some other way, I’ll be happy to continue with this with you.

The wordcount should have both the number for C rank and the number for B rank and it should be noted that going from C to B you only need to do the difference in wc
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Poison Clone  Empty Re: Poison Clone

Sat Feb 22, 2020 3:49 pm
WC should be 1050

AP 21, upkeep 10

Cooldown needs to be posts used + 1 due to how youve apped this

Need to specify the clones can only be made within two meters of the user

Specify the user's AP is split evenly between the clones rounded down.

The clones dont have to be half stats(though need to have 1 health point), additionally you can state the clones can use up to C rank techniques. Additionally state they all share the same cooldowns and cant recover AP. Also specify they spawn with the equipment of the user.

Make sure to specify the poison spreads out in its cloud form at the jutsu speed and in the shape of a sphere.

The debuff on the persons speed needs to be 20. Additionally remove the +2 in the "for the remaining of the jutsu duration that is upkept + 2"

You can increase the range of the technique to 30 meters from the user.
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Poison Clone  Empty Re: Poison Clone

Fri Feb 28, 2020 10:06 pm
Done, is this better?
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Poison Clone  Empty Re: Poison Clone

Tue Mar 03, 2020 8:15 am
So, seeing how this technique is a much more complicated clone then the usual batch, it'll have to be at least B rank and not just C. Sorry about not stating that before, can update the handseals, wc, AP and stats of the jutsu accordingly. I'd recommend five handseals atm.

for the duration, clones don't have to pay upkeep for themselvees to stay out, neither does the user. you activate the jutsu with a base amount of ap, and then from there split up the remaining numerical between the clones and yourself rounded down and thats all of yall AP. So just need to say until destroyed really for that. The gas is what will have the upkeep, and should be up to 3 posts.

For the range you can increase it to 50 meters. Also can you describe in appearance a bit how the clone forms? its not exactly a puff of smoke like shadow clone since you have a 'casting speed', not sure if the clone materializes or is first poison and then takes a clone form, etc etc.

" They can perform up to C rank techniques that the user has and spawn with the equipment of the user." Make it B rank. In the following sentence after that you shold probably say they follow shadow clone variant rules.

" If the individual can't pass the stat check, they would temporarily suffer with difficulty to breath. As their lungs take the impact of the poison's effect." So is that all it does on the respiratory side? No like lingering effects or more dramatic ones? just a bit shortness of breath and be done with it? You can do a bit more with that and expand, maybe create a system for if they stay within the poison it can actually cause their respiratory system to completely fail after x posts in there, need an antidote and all that jazz.

"With the respiratory system of the individual being attack, they would receive a temporary deduction of 20 to their speed for the remaining of the jutsu duration that is upkept." Update the number to B rank status, does this debuff last while the person is out of the poison?

"This poisonous gas that disperses after the denoted clone has the ability of forming a 5 meter diameter sphere from where the clone once stood." Can make it sayyyy 20 meters. Though depending on how you potentially choose to expand on the jutsu's poison capabilities it may be lowered a bit.
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Poison Clone  Empty Re: Poison Clone

Wed Mar 04, 2020 4:00 am
Updated- how is that? Was unsure of AP costs for B
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Poison Clone  Empty Re: Poison Clone

Sat Mar 07, 2020 6:23 pm
" if they fail to receive immediate appropriate medical attention or an antidote." you need to state how many posts equates to 'immediate medical attention and/or antidote'. id say 2 posts. Id also say medical attention or antidote that has a higher power than this tech mhm.

"If the effected individual fails to get out of the poison's range within the third post of it's duration, the poison will corrupt the individuals lungs. " so are you saying they have to be in the poison cloud range for 3 whole posts, or if they are in the cloud at the third mostpost they suffer these effects? if its the latter im not too much of a fan, id prefer if you say if they were in the poison for a minimum of 2 posts, thats fair imo.

Activation is 30 AP. Upkeep is 15 AP

"Power: 30 power for the poison stat check" You may want to remove the 'power for the poison stat check' and in the what it does when you reference a stat check say it happens at jutsu power. Gotta keep in mind how techs can power up and be stronger based on your stats. Same logic for speed btw, just say it spreads and the clones form at jutsu speed in the what it does but remove its mention in the actual speed category.

Other then that, we should be good to go really. Appreciate the patience.
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Poison Clone  Empty Re: Poison Clone

Thu Mar 12, 2020 7:59 pm
Made the corrections
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Poison Clone  Empty Re: Poison Clone

Mon Mar 16, 2020 10:52 pm
Approved, sorry about wait
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