Hozuki Art: Death Deterrence

Name: Hozuki Art: Death Deterrence
Element: Water
Rank: B/ A / S Rank
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Particular Jutsu Type: Block
Backstory: Siblings. You hate them, but you love them to a degree. However, in the pecking order, it's always the eldest first and those after them who become favorites. Unfortunately, some asshole told Ikazuchi- the Elder sister of Nozomi Hozuki- that she could also be a shinobi despite struggling with her chakra reserves. That same person told Ikazuchi that she could be a shinobi who focuses on Taijutsu and Nozomi “Baliquis” Hozuki smiled but at her core? Terrified. She was fucking terrified that her sister was not going to excel in something she did when they were kids: The good, ole sibling beat down. Ikazuchi was a veteran and an enviable top-tier belt-holder of the martial arts school of ‘Sibling Beat Down.’

So Baliquis hastily and blatantly made this technique to survive the next time her sister caught her in the streets, and it was fight-on-sight.

Appearance: A Hozuki’s body part explodes into water.

Handseals:

• B-Rank: Hare, Dog, Bird, Ram
  
• A-Rank: Hare, Dog, Bird, Ram, Snake
  
• S-Rank: Hare, Dog, Bird, Ram, Snake, Dragon, Dragon
  

Duration: Up to 4 Posts
Cooldown: Posts used +2.
Range: Self
Power: 50 / 70 / Vigor stat
Speed: 50 / 70 / Vigor stat
Health: -
Stat Boosts: -
What it does:

This technique allows a body part that is attacked by a jutsu/technique to transform into water, thus nullifying any permanent damage that would normally be done to it. This nullification only occurs if the blocked jutsu/technique has a power less than or equal to the power of this particular technique. This technique can nullify attacks in this nature a maximum of 1 / 2 / 3 times during its total duration before going into immediate cooldown.

Secondary Effect: “Come at me, Bro!”

At any rank of this technique, the user of this can subject a target to either a Strength check or Speed check, which will be determined by the user of this technique itself. The Strength/Speed check will go against this technique's Vigor stat, and if the target fails the check, they will be forced back by a wave of water originating from the user. This wave will knock the target back a maximum of 10 meters unless the wave is interrupted by other objects present on the battlefield.

Character Specific: -
Wordcount to learn: 1500 / 2500 / 5000
Action Cost: Activation: 30 AP / 40 AP / 50 AP
Upkeep: 15 AP  / 20 AP / 25 AP
Mastery: Yes for Handsealless.
Bonus Requirements: Hozuki DNA.
Canon, Custom, Bloodline, or Village Exclusive: Bloodline Exclusive.
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Okay I want to start by saying that I love the concept of this technique. There are, however, a few things that we need to do to get this app cleaned up.

Appearance:Hozuki Art: Death Deterrence XpQP A Hozuki’s body part explodes into water.

Can you please fix the link to reflect the photo that you wanted to show?

This technique allows a body part that is attacked by any attack that does not surpass the power stat upon a Hozuki BL member’s body to destroy the body part into the water instead of breaking bones. A strength check is done against the power of this jutsu to see if the body part can avoid permanent damage.

Can you please change this to say "This technique allows a body part that is attacked by a jutsu/technique to transform into water, thus nullifying any permanent damage that would normally be done to it. This nullification only occurs if the blocked jutsu/technique has power less than or equal to the power of this particular technique. This technique can nullify attacks in this nature a maximum of 1 / 2 / 3 times during its total duration before going into immediate cooldown."

For an additional 20AP/ 30 AP expense, the user of this technique can shift the power to Vigor Stat and select which of the following they would like to apply to the opponent:

• Strength Check
  
• Speed Check

As written, this section could not exist as the only way a technique can scale with stats is if it is S-Rank, which there is an S-Rank variant so this seems kind of redundant. Can it please be changed to say "At any rank of this technique, the user of this can can subject a target to either a Strength check or Speed check, which will be determined by the user of this technique itself. The Strength/Speed check will go against this technique's Vigor stat, and if the target fails the check they will be forced back by a wave of water originating from the user. This wave will knock the target back a maximum of 10 meters unless the wave is interrupted by other objects present on the battlefield."

Also, can we clean up the AP costs towards the bottom of the application, please?

Kaito Inuzuka wrote:Okay I want to start by saying that I love the concept of this technique. There are, however, a few things that we need to do to get this app cleaned up.

Appearance:Hozuki Art: Death Deterrence XpQP A Hozuki’s body part explodes into water.

Can you please fix the link to reflect the photo that you wanted to show?

This technique allows a body part that is attacked by any attack that does not surpass the power stat upon a Hozuki BL member’s body to destroy the body part into the water instead of breaking bones. A strength check is done against the power of this jutsu to see if the body part can avoid permanent damage.

Can you please change this to say "This technique allows a body part that is attacked by a jutsu/technique to transform into water, thus nullifying any permanent damage that would normally be done to it. This nullification only occurs if the blocked jutsu/technique has power less than or equal to the power of this particular technique. This technique can nullify attacks in this nature a maximum of 1 / 2 / 3 times during its total duration before going into immediate cooldown."

For an additional 20AP/ 30 AP expense, the user of this technique can shift the power to Vigor Stat and select which of the following they would like to apply to the opponent:

• Strength Check
  
• Speed Check
  

As written, this section could not exist as the only way a technique  can scale with stats is if it is S-Rank, which there is an S-Rank variant so this seems kind of redundant. Can it please be changed to say "At any rank of this technique, the user of this can can subject a target to either a Strength check or Speed check, which will be determined by the user of this technique itself. The Strength/Speed check will go against this technique's Vigor stat, and if the target fails the check they will be forced back by a wave of water originating from the user. This wave will knock the target back a maximum of 10 meters unless the wave is interrupted by other objects present on the battlefield."

Also, can we clean up the AP costs towards the bottom of the application, please?

Edited

Thank you for making the requested edits.

Trial Approved!