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Jun Shibasaki
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Taiyōton: Nikkō Shokei (Sunlight Execution) Empty Taiyōton: Nikkō Shokei (Sunlight Execution)

Tue Nov 08, 2022 2:57 pm
Name: Taiyōton: Nikkō Shokei (Sun Release: Sunlight Execution)
Element: Taiyōton – Sun Release
Rank: A
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Particular Jutsu Type: DoT
Backstory:
A technique created by Jun Shibasaki’s father, Yusuke Shibasaki. Unlike his brother, who enjoyed to demonstrate the Taiyoton's might by showing its raw, destructive power, favoring the Fire component of this advanced element, Yusuke developed techniques that emphasizes the Yang composition of Taiyoton, using Sun Release techniques that uses physical energy to control/target other people’s vitality. 

Appearance: This jutsu first manifests as a glowing orb, surrounded by 4 sunlight rims, in what resembles the graphical representation of a neutron, before the rims expands outwards with the glowing orb staying floating at the center.



How it looks:

Handseals: Serpent→ Hare → Tiger → Monkey → Ram → Dragon
Duration: up to 3 posts.
Cooldown: posts used +2
Range: Cast range – 25m/ Jutsu range: 20m
Power: 50
Speed: 50
Health: 
Stat Boosts:
What it does:

This jutsu consists in utilizing another aspect of Sun Release that is not its raw power or its destructive temperature. Instead, only the sunlight is used as a weapon this time, being this sunlight extremely harmful to organic matter due to the high concentrations of ultraviolet radiation that is emitted by it.

After doing the required handseals, the user of this jutsu will concentrate huge amounts of pure sunlight he generates using the Sun Release element, casting a shining pure sunlight orb of 20 cubic centimeters, surrounded by 4 interlinked rims that are 40 centimeters in diameter, either in front the user, using sunlight generated by the own user, or in a point within 25m of the user’s current position but no closer than 3m from another character, using already existing sunlight (if there is any). Immediately upon creation, the rims surrounding the glowing orb will expand at justu speed outwards in all directions in a spherical shape, until reaching its maximum range of 20 meters with the glowing orb staying floating at the center.

This sunlight rims emits a huge amount of solar ultraviolet radiation, affecting and contaminating everything that is organic matter (like people or jutsu made of "organic" elements such as wood release, thus not affecting puppets or weapons) inside the dome shaped area of this jutsu or anything organic that enters the jutsu area (both the rims and inside them) except the caster of this jutsu. This jutsu can be cast as a single burst, with the rims dissipating after reaching maximum range, or the user can choose to maintain the rims expanded to their full range for 2 extra turns after casting, by paying 23 AP as upkeep, but he can’t move the jutsu around after cast.

As the sunlight rims and the sunlight orb at the jutsu area centre are both made of Solar Chakra, both will clash with chakra based techniques only, being destroyed when clashing with a evenly strong or stronger technique. One must destroy all 4 rims or the sunlight orb (that generates the rims) to destroy this jutsu. On the other hand, the radiation released by the rims is intangible and won’t clash with other techniques, with the only way of living beings avoiding the effects of this radiation if being inside this jutsu range being by protecting themselves from the radiation bu using some sort of solid, inorganic barrier to block the radiation from infecting their bodies (like some barrier/armor/protection made of rocks, steel, ice...etc.). Such protections must have equal or higher power than this technique (or having higher health, when applicable) to withstand the radiation, otherwise it will just get through and infect its users anyway. This ultraviolet radiation deals 50 (flat and unalterable as per DoT guidelines) chakra-based damage for three posts unless counteracted by a Medical jutsu of equal or higher power. This ultraviolet radiation causes people to feel skin rashes, headaches, nausea and tiredness. If someone’s affected by the radiation HP gets to 0, they will die from it, with their organs remaining intact.

People contaminated by this ultraviolet radiation will go through a stat check as well, and if their Vigor stat is lower than this technique’s power, they’ll be incapacitated by the radiation, feeling very weak and being unable to move for the time they are contaminated and taking damage (up to 3 posts). If a person affected by the radiation gets healed by a medical jutsu of higher or equal power as mentioned before, this secondary effect will also cease. Only the caster of this jutsu is immune to the ultraviolet radiation effects.  

Character Specific: No
Wordcount to learn: 2500
Action Cost: 45 + 23 upkeep 
Mastery: Yes
Bonus Requirements: At least Stage 2 Tengan unlocked.
Canon, Custom, Bloodline, or Village Exclusive: 
Custom | Bloodline (Shibasaki Clan) 


Last edited by Jun Shibasaki on Mon Dec 05, 2022 9:04 am; edited 3 times in total
Crom Tokage
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Taiyōton: Nikkō Shokei (Sunlight Execution) Empty Re: Taiyōton: Nikkō Shokei (Sunlight Execution)

Thu Nov 24, 2022 3:00 am
Ok this has some glaring issues that need to be corrected. 

From reading Sun Release there is nothing in there that allows it to simply not interact with other techs Chakra or Physical or armors of the same vein. You mention multiple times about how it doesn't clash with techs due to being sunlight and radiation but one line speaks that the only way to avoid the damaging the effects of the tech is by physically defending themselves. 

As mentioned before, the sunlight rims and the radiation released by them are intangible and won’t clash with other techniques, with the only way of living beings avoiding the effects of this jutsu if caught in its range being by physically protecting themselves from the radiation.


The tech itself speaks on the rims as if they have Physical Mass that can be interacted with. 

anything organic that comes into contact with the jutsu area (even if not directly touching the rims

So I want to see some form of clashing being taken place here, from your own writing it should clash with both physical and chakra based techs.


 or in a point within 25m of the user’s current position but no closer than 3m from another character.

This is also Spawning a tech from nothing and is an S/T feature if you could mention that this is being formed by the already available sunlight that would be appreciated.

I am also unsure why this has a Strength check to see if your body feels the effects of the tech and would like this to be a Vigor Check. 

So just to recap, this needs to have a clashing of some sort happening, str check changed to vigor and mentions of the tech using existing sunlight to form and not coming into existence from nothing.
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Taiyōton: Nikkō Shokei (Sunlight Execution) Empty Re: Taiyōton: Nikkō Shokei (Sunlight Execution)

Fri Nov 25, 2022 10:58 am
Hello there Crom! Thanks for reviewing my app! I adressed the issued you pointed out and made the changes as instructed (I think lol). Please, when you have some time, evaluate this again and check if it is in accordance to NRPG rules.
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Strength: 5 points
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Taiyōton: Nikkō Shokei (Sunlight Execution) Empty Re: Taiyōton: Nikkō Shokei (Sunlight Execution)

Sat Dec 03, 2022 10:41 am
Hello, and sorry this took so long to get looked over again after you made your edits.

I am willing to give a Trial Approval, but request that this technique be put on watch as it seems extremely powerful.
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